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When her mom went to check the mail at breakfast, she returned with a thin box in her arms.

It was a package from her father.

Her dad was sort of like a traveler... at least, that was what she assumed he was. His job always had him jumping from city to city, country to country. He'd been to almost everywhere around the world, and every few weeks, he would send her a letter with a little souvenir from his stay. This time, it was a miniature Eiffel Tower.

So he's in France again, she mused, studying the two-foot tall replica. A small chuckle escaped her lips. It was about time he remembered to get it for her! He really should've thought of buying it six visits ago. She opened the small envelope attached to package and read the letter inside with a fond smile. When she finished reading, she stood up and excused herself from the table. Her mom answered with a sad smile as she nodded.

She raced up the stairs and headed for the Gift Room. It was a special place in the house just for her dad's souvenirs. Her mom gave her the spare room when the stuff started taking up too much space in her bedroom. She set the little tower among the many, many other gifts she received. (Miniature landmarks, books, paintings, mugs, clothes, toys, key-chains, jewelry… even strange-colored rocks and pressed flowers.) Each thing had a story behind them that her father always explained so vividly in the letter that came with it.

A small smile made its way to her face as she looked over at the large map that took up a whole wall of the room. It was her very first gift. On it, was an assortment of dots that formed dozens of different shapes and patterns. Each time her father sent her something, she would mark his location on the large map. Sometimes, she would try finding a pattern in her father's travels and try to guess where the next souvenir would come from.

She always loved the gifts her dad sent her. Who could say they had something from almost every country in the world? Even if it was just a rock or a flower. Her dad had the best taste in gifts too; he always knew what to get her.

But as she took a small thumbtack and placed a seventh brightly-colored marker on France, a frown made its way to her face. Her father had been almost everywhere around the world, but there was one place she was sure he had yet to visit.

Home.
And the angst/sadness fairy strikes again! I've been working on this for a while now, just a few days after finishing "Not Anymore". I'm not sure what brought this on either. I assume that it's cause Father's Day was approaching. Funny how I finished this sad piece on Father's day... ^^;

Like my last short story, I would like to point out that I have absolutely no bitter feelings of resentment toward my Father. I am his spoiled eldest child and I love him sooooooo much~!!

June 18, 2012: I made just a tiny little edit due to a suggestion by :iconwinterkate:
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Given 2013-01-07
Souvenirs by ~RoamingShadow Suggester Writes: Often in stories about absent parents, said parent is maliciously or stupidly neglectful. I like that this take is of a loving father who simply can't be there, but is not a terrible person for it; I imagine many families can relate to a similar situation. ( Suggested by SilverInkblot and Featured by Beccalicious )

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Quie-Scent Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Aww! I almost cried reading this. Such a beautiful story. Good job! ...Good enough to even get a DD! Awesome!
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British-Prophetess Featured By Owner May 28, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Oh wow, I never knew this was featured as a DD - congratulations! :D

I have to say this was such a moving and touching short story you have written here. I do have mixed feelings about the father though as it's clear that he's thoughtful in buying interesting gifts for his daughter when he's travelling around the world  - something about that is rather cool :XD:

However the last line really does it for me. The overall message is that no amount of gifts will ever make up for the lack of a parent's presence in a child's life.

Wonderful work as always :D
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hopeburnsblue Featured By Owner May 11, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
 Aaawww, sad. :(
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RoamingShadow Featured By Owner May 11, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
You did like it though, right? ^^
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hopeburnsblue Featured By Owner May 11, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
 Oh, of course. It was very moving. :hug:
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Liz-DarkWarrior Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
that last bit got to me my poor daddy is such a workaholic. I really like how the topic is easy to relate to and you really establish that emotional connection between the girl and her father (that helps with the sting at the end :iconsobbplz:)

great job!
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ToddNTheShiningSword Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I can't Comment on THIS either!:XD: But this time it's 'cause there's no need 'cause this got a Daily Deviation. You're amazing. Let's try to find another piece and see if I can finally leave a meaningful Comment OTL.
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theamazingwrabbit Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
nice! I think more Flash Fics should make DDs.
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catelee2u Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Very well written.
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Falljoydelux Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
All of the feels! :iconhnnnnngplz:
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