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When her mom went to check the mail at breakfast, she returned with a thin box in her arms.

It was a package from her father.

Her dad was sort of like a traveler... at least, that was what she assumed he was. His job always had him jumping from city to city, country to country. He'd been to almost everywhere around the world, and every few weeks, he would send her a letter with a little souvenir from his stay. This time, it was a miniature Eiffel Tower.

So he's in France again, she mused, studying the two-foot tall replica. A small chuckle escaped her lips. It was about time he remembered to get it for her! He really should've thought of buying it six visits ago. She opened the small envelope attached to package and read the letter inside with a fond smile. When she finished reading, she stood up and excused herself from the table. Her mom answered with a sad smile as she nodded.

She raced up the stairs and headed for the Gift Room. It was a special place in the house just for her dad's souvenirs. Her mom gave her the spare room when the stuff started taking up too much space in her bedroom. She set the little tower among the many, many other gifts she received. (Miniature landmarks, books, paintings, mugs, clothes, toys, key-chains, jewelry… even strange-colored rocks and pressed flowers.) Each thing had a story behind them that her father always explained so vividly in the letter that came with it.

A small smile made its way to her face as she looked over at the large map that took up a whole wall of the room. It was her very first gift. On it, was an assortment of dots that formed dozens of different shapes and patterns. Each time her father sent her something, she would mark his location on the large map. Sometimes, she would try finding a pattern in her father's travels and try to guess where the next souvenir would come from.

She always loved the gifts her dad sent her. Who could say they had something from almost every country in the world? Even if it was just a rock or a flower. Her dad had the best taste in gifts too; he always knew what to get her.

But as she took a small thumbtack and placed a seventh brightly-colored marker on France, a frown made its way to her face. Her father had been almost everywhere around the world, but there was one place she was sure he had yet to visit.

Home.
And the angst/sadness fairy strikes again! I've been working on this for a while now, just a few days after finishing "Not Anymore". I'm not sure what brought this on either. I assume that it's cause Father's Day was approaching. Funny how I finished this sad piece on Father's day... ^^;

Like my last short story, I would like to point out that I have absolutely no bitter feelings of resentment toward my Father. I am his spoiled eldest child and I love him sooooooo much~!!

June 18, 2012: I made just a tiny little edit due to a suggestion by :iconwinterkate:
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Given 2013-01-07
Souvenirs by ~RoamingShadow Suggester Writes: Often in stories about absent parents, said parent is maliciously or stupidly neglectful. I like that this take is of a loving father who simply can't be there, but is not a terrible person for it; I imagine many families can relate to a similar situation. ( Suggested by SilverInkblot and Featured by BeccaJS )

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Quie-Scent Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Aww! I almost cried reading this. Such a beautiful story. Good job! ...Good enough to even get a DD! Awesome!
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British-Prophetess Featured By Owner May 28, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Oh wow, I never knew this was featured as a DD - congratulations! :D

I have to say this was such a moving and touching short story you have written here. I do have mixed feelings about the father though as it's clear that he's thoughtful in buying interesting gifts for his daughter when he's travelling around the world  - something about that is rather cool :XD:

However the last line really does it for me. The overall message is that no amount of gifts will ever make up for the lack of a parent's presence in a child's life.

Wonderful work as always :D
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hopeburnsblue Featured By Owner May 11, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
 Aaawww, sad. :(
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RoamingShadow Featured By Owner May 11, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
You did like it though, right? ^^
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hopeburnsblue Featured By Owner May 11, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
 Oh, of course. It was very moving. :hug:
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Liz-DarkWarrior Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
that last bit got to me my poor daddy is such a workaholic. I really like how the topic is easy to relate to and you really establish that emotional connection between the girl and her father (that helps with the sting at the end :iconsobbplz:)

great job!
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ToddNTheShiningSword Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I can't Comment on THIS either!:XD: But this time it's 'cause there's no need 'cause this got a Daily Deviation. You're amazing. Let's try to find another piece and see if I can finally leave a meaningful Comment OTL.
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theamazingwrabbit Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
nice! I think more Flash Fics should make DDs.
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catelee2u Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Very well written.
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Falljoydelux Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
All of the feels! :iconhnnnnngplz:
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RoamingShadow Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Awwww, I punched you in the feels :hug:
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vedisdragon Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Now this is something that actually deserves a DD.
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RoamingShadow Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:iconfoxawwplz: Thank you so much :heart:
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Adonael Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Wow. That last line hits pretty hard.
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Fevley Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013
I love how well she knows her father, and how she knows he loves and cares for her. I especially love how the ending doesn't read like angst, just hopeful wistfulness. Keep it up! :}
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Doodelay Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013  Student Writer
Congrats on the DD
The story was very precious
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RoamingShadow Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :D
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SilverShadowPheonix Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013
I love this story. I love how she feels like she has a connection with her father though he hasn't been in her life physically. She has a shrine of sorts built for him. She tracks his movements like one would track a wild beast they wish to capture, but her prey will never be captured. He as aloof as the wind.
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Karinta Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013  Student General Artist
Very nice concept. I love the one-word last line: it's effective. :hug:
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Phaedrus-42 Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Short and simple and to the point! Very effectively written. Congrats on the well-deserved DD!
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lintu47 Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Congrats on the well deserved DD! :dalove:
Have a nice day! :heart:
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RoamingShadow Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much :D
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lintu47 Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
My pleasure :happybounce:
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Zee-Who Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013  Hobbyist
Congrats on your Daily Deviation!:squee::heart:
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RoamingShadow Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :hug:
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LiliWrites Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Congratulations on the DD! :la:
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RoamingShadow Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! :hug:
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SilverInkblot Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Hi there! Just a note to let you know I've featured this piece in my 2012 showcase of 100 pieces of literature: [link] :D
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RoamingShadow Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! :D
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SilverInkblot Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome :)
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SurrealCachinnation Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2012   Writer
Angst/sadness fairy? :giggle:

This is a beautiful piece. Very touching... in a sad sort of way. I would love to have an object from so many different countries... but not at that cost. My dad and I are really close. I would've been miserable growing up that way.
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RoamingShadow Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Yes, the angst/sadness fairy. It's what I call the little voice in my head that tell to burn thi-- I mean, write sad stories :XD:

I'm really glad that you liked my story. Thank you for adding it to your favorites :D
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SurrealCachinnation Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2012   Writer
I think I might have one of those... I like to kill pe--write sad stories. :nod:

You are most welcome. :aww:
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SilverInkblot Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Hello there :) Just a note to say I've featured this piece in my journal: [link]
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RoamingShadow Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you, I'm glad you liked my story enough to add it :D
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SilverInkblot Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Anytime :D
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secondhand-wings Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
this is a very very lovely piece. You open and close a whole world with very distinct, believable characters within several paragraphs. Really well done.
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RoamingShadow Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you, I'm really glad you liked it! :D
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callerofcrows Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This was wonderful. So bittersweet. :heart:
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RoamingShadow Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I'm really glad you liked it :D
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GothKoala439 Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Heartwarming and beautiful :heart:
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RoamingShadow Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :D
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DailyLitDeviations Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2012
Your wonderful literary work has been chosen to be featured by DLD (Daily Literature Deviations) and has been selected as our “Pick of the Day”. It is featured in a news article here: [link] and on our main page.

Keep writing and keep creating.
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RoamingShadow Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! :D
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winterkate Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2012  Student Writer
This is excellent. I love the way you structured it. The descriptions were neat and the character felt very real. I don't think she should be crying at the end, though. It sounds like she's too excited/this is too much of a regular occurrence to merit such sadness in the beginning. I think just having her frown would reveal the underlying emotions while preserving the sense of sadness attached to the piece. Love the last line, though! 'Home'.
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RoamingShadow Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you, and I'm really glad you liked it :D
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winterkate Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2012  Student Writer
You're welcome, I am too lol :D
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